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07 June 2010 @ 05:37 pm
Numb3rs Fic: Rubble  
Written for numb3rs100 Challenge #266 – Fluent


Title: Rubble
Pairing/Characters: David, OCs
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 200
Spoilers: Sabotage, Arm in Arms
Summary: David sees the horrors of war first hand when a bomb goes off in Tel Aviv
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ


One stray bomb.

They'd come running, but the damage had already been done and those perpetrating it long gone.

The devastation staggered David and he fell a step or two behind his team, spreading out across the space littered with what was once a simple family home.

Screams rent the air; smoke assailed his nostrils with an acrid chemical stench.

They'd probably been aiming for the military installation down the street, the one David had been getting a briefing in when they heard the shell impact.

He'd been in Tel Aviv long enough to see horrors of war, but this was too close, too visceral.

A woman, clothes bloodied and shredded by shrapnel, sat sprawled on the ground cradling her unmoving child in her arms. Her wails and curses weren't in a language he knew, but her pain was blisteringly easy to understand.

David tapped his team leader on the arm. He was fluent in Hebrew and Arabic, he'd know what to say.

"How do we say we're sorry?" David asked.

The man just looked back at him, the lack of emotion on his face more disturbing than the rubble of the family home they were standing in.

"We don't."

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Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on June 8th, 2010 12:38 am (UTC)
Confession
This fic didn't turn out like I'd hoped, but try as I might I couldn't get a better idea by the deadline. /shrugs/ Sometime it goes like that - the price I pay of not being able to execute to the level of my mental ideal.

FWIW, I know there's an episode where David talks about a bombing in Tel Aviv. If anyone remembers which it was LMK and I'll add it as a spoiler even though it technically doesn't spoil it - just that he was in Tel Aviv, which is covered by the Sabotage spoiler. I couldn't remember the details enough to write that instance specifically so I had to make this one up.

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on June 8th, 2010 12:51 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
I remember in "Janus List" he said something along the lines of '... I saw the same setup in Tel Aviv...' but then there was the one with the arms dealer... and the two gangs that bought the bad guns... hhmm...

This was INCREDIBLE, Em.... and that last two lines... ... wow.

Well done.
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on June 8th, 2010 12:54 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Frienemies is the other one -- the two gangs...
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 8th, 2010 12:56 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Do you recall any of what was said?
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on June 8th, 2010 01:10 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Nope... wrong episode (for the gun runner -- right for the gangs...) Looking....
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on June 8th, 2010 01:38 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Arm in Arms... ok....

David: I got an image in my mind that can't get rid of, can't shake it. It's always there. Goes back to my first posting in Israel. There was a family, uh, and I had gotten to them right after there house was hit by a rocket. They were still sitting around their dinner table covered in blood. Dying. They didn't even know what happened to them.

What are the chances that that rocket is something that you supplied?

It's at about 28 minutes...
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 8th, 2010 01:39 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Cool! Thanks!

It's too far off to be my fic, but I'll put the spoiler on anyway since that was the impetus for the fic.

Gracias!
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on June 8th, 2010 01:40 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Anytime :)
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 8th, 2010 12:55 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Thank you. I just wish we had a fully searchable transcript file/folder/database/site of Numb3rs scripts, you know? It'd make research so much easier.
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on June 8th, 2010 01:08 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
I have it on iTunes, I can watch it really quick and get back to you.

... ... Well... I have a 'lot' of time on my hands... I did the "Sniper Zero" transcript... I could try and do the others -- iTunes doesn't have Closed Captioning which is what I used also to do SZ.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 8th, 2010 01:26 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
TVsubtitles.net has plenty of .SRT files for Numb3rs. Someone would just need to clean them up and add in who talks when since it's not clear from the CC. It would be a bonus to have the rest added (like scene changes, locations, etc.) but that's a lot more work.

It would still be a lot of work to do them, but one could set up a comm or a wiki or something to get volunteers once a system is put in place for how to do it. I helped the Bones people with the how tos because they were just going to try to do transcripts by listening! Gah! What a recipe for disaster on a science show! /mind boggles/
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on June 8th, 2010 01:44 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Hhmm... well... I don't know anything about SRT files. I think we've had some type of conversation regarding them before but... for the life of me, I can't recall anything of it /laugh.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 8th, 2010 01:46 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
An SRT is just a text file containing what you see on the screen as closed captioning. (Plus some time codes).

Download one and open it up in like Wordpad or Notepad to see what's in it. Pretty straightforward but IMHO saves a ton of typing.
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on June 8th, 2010 01:49 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Ah, that's what I missed.... computer didn't know what to open it with...
rubynye: Galaxyrubynye on June 8th, 2010 01:06 am (UTC)
Oh, Emma! This is wrenching, and thaat last line -- !
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 8th, 2010 01:27 am (UTC)


Once again David needs more love...

/hugs you/
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Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 8th, 2010 05:01 am (UTC)
Thank you. I tried to forget them for weeks but they kept coming back so I had to write it.
ladygray99ladygray99 on June 8th, 2010 05:46 am (UTC)
I think this is just perfect and fits in nicely with what we know of David and the last two lines are great.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 8th, 2010 07:38 am (UTC)
Thank you. One day I'll branch out and make my own fleshed out David as you have, but for now I like playing up the aspects of canon we have for him that give him depth.
Candi: David at Workmustangcandi on June 8th, 2010 11:26 am (UTC)
"How do we say we're sorry?" David asked.

The man just looked back at him, the lack of emotion on his face more disturbing than the rubble of the family home they were standing in.

"We don't."


*stabs out heart* This hurts so good. Poor David. Loved the way you described what he was seeing and feeling during this - and you know David, being the man that he is, would have really wanted to say he was sorry for the mother's loss. Bless his heart. I do so love him. This was wonderful as always. *sigh
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 9th, 2010 07:31 am (UTC)
Thanks, hon. I just know that David - especially being new at the time - would feel this so deeply and be so affronted and appalled at the lack of sensitivity shown by his team leader. I'm glad he fought becoming jaded and became the still caring man we saw in canon at the end of the series. It just proves Don's world weary jaded career isn't the only way to go. David can be by the book and still feel things without letting it get in the way of the work. That - in itself - is a good reason for him to get promoted like he did.
melissima: Sad Charlie by <lj user=delgaserasca>melissima on June 9th, 2010 07:00 am (UTC)
Wow.

Poor David! To be there must be awful enough, but to have his CO be so unfeeling? Gah! /shudders/ That's just awful.

I don't know what this fic was like in your head before you wrote it, but it vividly conveys the horror of war and the helplessness David felt at not being able to offer even the tiny succor of an apology. It's unsettling, exactly as it should be -- well done.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 9th, 2010 07:32 am (UTC)
It was more visceral in my head, but I'm still struggling with getting what I see/feel inside out onto the page. I 'keep on trying' though. ;-)

/hums along with Booth and Bones/