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03 December 2010 @ 11:57 pm
White Collar Fic: Right Idea Wrong Person  
Written for whitecollar100 Challenge #022 – Savings


Title: Right Idea Wrong Person
Pairing/Characters: Neal, Peter, Elizabeth, Mozzie
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 300
Spoilers: Point Blank
Summary: Peter's used to saving people not failing to save them
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ


"Damn it!"

Peter slammed his hand against the stark white hospital wall, no longer able to keep his frustration inside. A passing nurse gave him a warning glare so he put up his hands in apology and backed away, forcing his feet to return to the waiting room he'd left Neal and Elizabeth in so he could pace off his excess energy and anger.

He'd been right. The killer had planned on a second target. Only that second target wasn't Neal. If he'd only stopped and rewound the tape a few seconds he would have seen Mozzie on it, he would have known there were two people in need of saving, not just one.

Peter closed his eyes against the visual of the raw anguish on Neal's face when he'd seen Mozzie flatline in the ER. He'd sworn when he saw that look on Neal's face the first time he'd do what it took to get him justice for his loss. And instead, he'd not found justice, he'd just gotten another one of Neal's loved ones killed.

Still, they shocked him back and whisked him off to surgery so there was a chance left, a tiny one, and Elizabeth was repeating that over and over to Neal as he sat with his head in his hands, bemoaning dragging Mozzie into his world. Only it wasn't Neal's fault. It was Peter's. He could have prevented all of this.

Steeling himself, he opened the door only to see a doctor standing with Neal's tear-stained face looking up at him as Elizabeth hugged him close.

"No..." The word was more breath and plea than sound.

And then Neal's gaze turned to Peter and a brightness behind the watery eyes shined through.

"He's going to make it," Neal choked out. "Mozzie's going to live."

o--c
 
 
 
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 4th, 2010 07:57 am (UTC)
Confession
At least I got this one in early, eh?

I confess I didn't spend any amount of time on it, but I hope I can be forgiven for my finals drabbles being less than stellar. ;-)

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
TeeJay: cry beneath your armortj_teejay on December 4th, 2010 08:25 am (UTC)
Beautiful. Love this! Very intense and very true to the show.
a rearranger of the proverbial bookshelf: White Collar - Nealembroiderama on December 4th, 2010 11:35 am (UTC)
I love the depth of emotion here in Peter's POV.
bev_crusher1971bev_crusher1971 on December 4th, 2010 11:53 am (UTC)
Bad girl ... you shocked me in thinking Mozzie's dead. Glad he isn't.

:-) Love your WC stories.
ladygray99ladygray99 on December 4th, 2010 01:02 pm (UTC)
Less than stellar my ass. It's a beautiful showing of Peter's inner life.
rubynye: Don (by weirdkid624)rubynye on December 4th, 2010 01:55 pm (UTC)
Oh, EEE. This was a world of tension and self-recrimination in just 300 words!
RabidChild's Ficrabidchild on December 17th, 2010 10:17 am (UTC)
Wow - so intense! Thank you.