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14 December 2011 @ 11:59 pm
Numb3rs Fic: Just A Little Off Course (The Down South Remix)  
Written for numb3rs100 2011 Drabble Remixathon - Remix of Just A Little Off Course by sororcula/Challenge #10 - Travel


Title: Just A Little Off Course (The Down South Remix)
Pairing/Characters: David/Liz
Rating: R
Word Count: 600
Spoilers: Pilot, Longshot
Summary: The windows are down and the breeze whips Liz's loose hair around as she drives down the highway
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ


Jacaranda trees give way to palm trees give way to chaparral as the Historic Route signs fly by.

"The fact remains that I am driving." The windows are down and the breeze whips Liz's loose hair around enough David can barely see her mock stern expression as she drives down the highway. "And driver picks the music."

They've only been on the road for twenty minutes and they're already debating - that's her euphemism for it at least - about the road trip soundtrack. Liz turns up the volume with an assertive twist of her wrist as if to punctuate her winning point.

He says nothing, mostly because he's well aware of how much she's waiting for him to respond. He knows her well. She's got a half dozen retorts planned and is just itching for a chance to use one of them. Only one way to win this game: don't play.

It works and she softens, her glance more playful than triumphant at this point.

"Hey," she says, turning the volume back down and acting like it's suddenly not a deal at all. "Couple hundred miles and we'll switch places."

He just smiles and makes a mental note of the odometer.

+

Rest stops aren't always meant for resting. After spending the better part of an hour tied up in traffic behind a jack-knifed semi, Liz had gotten too tense to keep driving without road rage becoming an issue. Zooming around stereotypical little old ladies from Pasadena is never a good sign.

There's gravel beneath his knees, pressing into his skin even through his jeans, but he ignores it in favor of the trembling thighs beneath his hands. He's not even sure where her feet are behind him - on the windshield, up against the headliner - but if Liz's careless moans are any indication she might not be aware of their location either.

He can tell she's close when she squeezes his hand. She's gorgeous like this: laid out wantonly over the leather seats, tawny skin aglow with the last of the desert heat, the scent of her sex in his nostrils, twirling on his tongue. Her arm is thrown across her eyes and all he can see is her mouth wide open in an 'O' of orgasmic awe.

Someone could see, it's not even dark yet, but somehow David doesn't care about anything other than Liz's slender body arching up in completion beneath him.

+

It's got to be the corniest gift shop ever, but he's more bored than bemused. So he texts her from like fifteen feet away, feeling snarky.

Wish you were here.

He doesn't have to wait long for a response.

Greetings from the home of the world's largest recorded armadillo.

That gets him to laugh and the war is on; thank goodness for unlimited texting.

World's second biggest ball of twine next?

Why not go for the gusto: the biggest!

Sure that's not a comedown from armadillos?

Say is that an armadillo in your pocket or are you just glad to see me?

He can't help himself at this point. He's laughing so hard the woman behind the counter is staring so he buys an armadillo keychain that's horribly overpriced to assuage her. He figures it's a souvenir of a moment he'll enjoy replaying in his head later so not a bad choice for a keychain.

Liz's nowhere to be seen when he looks up, but she's out by the car waiting in a pair of huge Paris Hilton style sunglasses. She preens, smirking, and he just gives her a wink and heads for the driver's seat.

It's his turn now.

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Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 19th, 2011 11:33 pm (UTC)
Confession
This fic was written for the 2011 Drabble Remixathon at numb3rs100. The original author was sororcula whose fic I remixed was Just A Little Off Course.

I honestly could never write like Sor; she has a style that I couldn't mimic if I tried. Still, I envy that she has such style and wish mine was as coherent and reliable as hers. I knew remixing her would mess with that style, but I tried to at least keep the original feel of her fic: the atmospshere of the first part, the sexiness of the second and the humor of the last. In fact I spent so much time (and words) trying to capture those things I turned a 300 word fic into three 200 word ones. Oops! I guess I got a little carried away. ;-)

But hey, bonus! The original was a gift fic for mustangcandi, who likes David/Liz, so I figured this is like a second present for her as well! Win/Win/Win! (I love it when a plan comes together!)

The funky remix title (in the parentheses) was partially inspired by Sor's title source and partially by David's *ahem* activities in the middle of the fic. /snicker/

Hope you like the remix Sor and thanks for all your lovely fic at N100 over the years!

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
perhaps some frottage is in order: [numb3rs] David/Liz zip me upsororcula on December 20th, 2011 12:06 am (UTC)
!!!!

This is GORGEOUS. I love love love how you expanded it with details and made it so atmospheric with the chaparral and the desert heat. I also like that you explained why David was eating her out, hahaha. My writing process is just like "and now David goes down on Liz." :-P I really enjoyed reading this from his POV, and finally:

Say is that an armadillo in your pocket or are you just glad to see me?

that made me laugh. :-D

Thank you so much!! I really love this. ♥
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on December 20th, 2011 02:01 am (UTC)
YW, hon! I figured I can't match you so I just tried to add more to enjoy. David needs no reason, but it helped me make it 200/200/200. /grins/

I HAD to put that last text in. As bad a joke as it is, it's totally what she'd do to crack him up.

I kind of adore your visual of her in the oversized shades; it's so Liz. I had a lot of fun playing in your world and I hope Candi will enjoy this second helping of David/Liz.

So glad you enjoyed this. /hugs you across the miles/
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Candi: David and Liz Booksmustangcandi on December 20th, 2011 08:46 pm (UTC)
The original was a gift fic for [info]mustangcandi, who likes David/Liz...

That may be the understatement of the century. I love, love, love David/Liz. I only love them more when they are coming from the pens of sororcula and emmademarais. This drabble remix is like my idea of heaven... it's the best of all things rolled into one! *flops around and flails*

The original is one of my most favorite drabbles so getting to see this from David's POV was just absolutely fantastic! I love how well they know each other and how something silly makes him laugh. That fun/playful side was something we didn't get to see much of from David or Liz. I love that they get to bring it out in each other.

This totally was like a second present and it's not even my birthday. This totally made this grey and slow day so much brighter and warmer. I'm seriously in heaven. THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!
ladygray99: Davidladygray99 on December 26th, 2011 01:37 pm (UTC)
Say is that an armadillo in your pocket or are you just glad to see me?
You do not know how hard this made me laugh.