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18 August 2007 @ 01:13 pm
Numb3rs Fic: More Than a Trophy  
Written for numb3rs100 Challenge #120 – Naked

Title: More Than a Trophy
Series/Universe: Natural Assets
Pairing/Characters: Don/Liz
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 300
Spoilers: Longshot, Blackout, Money for Nothing
Summary: Liz almost gave up on being more than a plaything to men
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ

She's half-naked on the bed and on the verge of fulfilling one of her better Quantico fantasies when his phone rings.

He answers it. The putz.

He says he has to go. Unbelievable.

Suddenly she's sixteen again, caught with her shirt off by Jay Ladoc's mom making out on the sofa in the den after curfew. She's not sure what's worse: the embarrassment of being undressed in an awkward situation or the frustration of being left wanting.

After he leaves she mopes around, feeling sorry for herself before mentally kicking herself. She's a grown woman and a Bureau agent too. She knows the work comes first.

Still, the voice inside her head reminds her of too many disposable men who said they cared but shunted her aside - once they got what they wanted - in favor of work, sports, their buddies...

Don doesn't return. She locks the door.


The next day he calls, apologizes.

She convinces herself it's okay. Nothing she hasn't dealt with before. She figures all she and Don will have is sex. It's been so long she's forgotten what it's like to have more.

Despite her pessimism, Don keeps asking her out, acting like a gentleman, treating her with respect at work and when they're together.

When she voices concern about appearances, he doesn't break it off like she assumed he would. He stands up in front of the team and admits his relationship with her, head held high.

She's taken aback and for the first time in a long time she feels like more than just a trophy to be won and shown off.

"Was that okay?" he asks her later, genuinely concerned. She responds with an ardent kiss, reassuring him.

She holds him tightly, silently trying to reassure herself she won't screw this up.

Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on August 18th, 2007 08:11 pm (UTC)
So I had two options: ignore the relationship with Don so as to completely avoid any chance of making Liz look like a Don!prop or take on her side of the story and hope I didn't fail at making her something more.

I've only once in my life had my heart broken by a boy (yes boy - it was high school and despite him being eighteen he was definitely immature enough for that designation) who admitted he only dated me to have a pretty girl on his arm to show off. Bastard.

I imagined Liz attracted a lot of men who acted like they wanted to know the real her, but just used that to get into her pants. (I'm not normally that crude, but that sort of despicable behavior deserves not to be sugarcoated.) After a while it might be like the boy who cried wolf - she hears their nice words and thinks yeah yeah to herself.

The thing is, Don is actually different and now she's faced with the prospect of having to go through with a real relationship. I had to cut some lines when talking about her past to get this down to size and one I did I'll paste here for some perspective. (It got cut for being corny, but the idea behind it I liked.)

Withholding sex never worked, so she'd finally given in and withheld her heart instead.

And one more trite bit that got cut. (What? You thought my drabbles came out perfect on first draft? LOL!)

Once she turned off that side of her that could feel, could love, could risk...
She couldn't seem to get it back.

You know I don't recall ever publishing discarded/alternate versions of fic before. I'd better hurry up and post this before I regret showing how lame I can be in first drafts. Hehehe

One last thing...

I confess I have no clue where the name Jay Ladoc came from.


Emma DeMarais
iolsaiiolsai on August 18th, 2007 08:55 pm (UTC)
Re: Confession
I can definitely relate to the withholding your heart part..

Men suck. Well, at least those I've dated.
Write me one like your Don in this story!

melissima: Billy...*drool*melissima on August 18th, 2007 10:43 pm (UTC)
Re: Confession
Ooh! Me too! Me too! <3 And, if it's not too much trouble can he have freckles?
iolsaiiolsai on August 19th, 2007 12:54 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
I was actually going to ask for that for Christmas, but then I realized that is four months away.
I want it NOW NOW NOW!
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on August 19th, 2007 07:52 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on August 19th, 2007 07:44 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
Wait! Did I miss the part where I'm taking *orders* for men now?
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on August 19th, 2007 07:43 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
You know everyone else just asks for Don. ;-)
Ma Yumi: Don5ym4yum1 on October 25th, 2011 03:50 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
You know everyone else just asks for Don.

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Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on August 19th, 2007 07:43 am (UTC)
Liz icon!

I'm glad to hear this. If you like it, Leda, then it's all worthwhile. Thank you.