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08 February 2008 @ 10:03 am
Numb3rs Fic: A Gentle Rain  
Written for numb3rs100 Challenge #145 – Storm

Title: A Gentle Rain
Pairing/Characters: Don/Terry
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 100
Spoilers: Pilot
Summary: Terry understands by now how Don reacts to crimes against children
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ

He blows in, a nor'easter, the perfect storm - forceful in his rage and unstoppable in his quest for justice.

A girl is dead and Don swears he is going to tear the son of a bitch who raped and dismembered her into pieces.

Terry sits, the eye of the storm, letting him whirl around her.

Ten years she's known him.

In one hour the hurricane will wane.

In two hours they'll be in her bed.

In three hours all that will remain is a gentle rain falling to her bare skin as he pillows his head on her chest.

Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on February 8th, 2008 06:03 pm (UTC)
For those of you not familiar with the northeastern part of the U.S. (or who didn't see the movie) a Nor'easter is a nasty storm, the Perfect Storm was a nasty nor'easter and Quantico - FBI headquarters - is located in the northeast.

A girl is dead and Don swears he is going to tear the son of a bitch who raped and dismembered her into pieces.

I wanted Terry to point out the irony of that statement, but with only 100 words there was no room, so I'm doing it here to expunge that desire from my head.


Emma DeMarais
fredbassettfredbassett on February 8th, 2008 06:11 pm (UTC)
Beautifully written, and very powerful.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on February 8th, 2008 06:49 pm (UTC)
Thank you.

I know there aren't many readers on Fridays, so I am glad someone saw this. :-)
andi: Don Dark Avengeradmiralandrea on February 8th, 2008 06:39 pm (UTC)
This is great imagery. I can really see Don as the perfect storm of vengence...
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on February 8th, 2008 06:49 pm (UTC)
Thank you. One of my goals this year is to work on imagery.
iolsaiiolsai on February 8th, 2008 07:07 pm (UTC)
This is so evocative.
Especially the way you used the anaphora.

For some reason I like it even better now than when I first read it this morning.

Well done!
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on February 8th, 2008 09:39 pm (UTC)
You mean that repetition thing I do has a *name*!

/looks it up/

I can has literary devices! \o/

Really, you'd think this self-taught thing would get old after a while and I'd bother to get off my duff and go *learn* about writing...

Yay for it getting better with a second reading! That pleases me greatly. Merci!
iolsaiiolsai on February 8th, 2008 10:20 pm (UTC)
You're welcome.

Well, you could also just pay more attention to what *I* am telling you.
You've used that particular device several times and knowing me (or well, gmail transcripts :-P)) I've named it before...

Just kidding.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on February 8th, 2008 10:58 pm (UTC)
If by several you mean all the time... :-P

Ah, the beauty of transcripts...

You brought it up late one night *once* last year. (Clearly not enough for it to stick.) You also said it's just a repeated phrase, but the definitions seem to say it's for the beginnings of lines only not general repetition as I understood you to say.

Not stopping you from sending me lists of literary devices. I'm all ears.

/laughs picturing Sweets on Bones/
iolsaiiolsai on February 8th, 2008 11:04 pm (UTC)
Since I had to suffer through it in *four* languages, er. learn about it, I could teach literary devices at this point.

I was sure I had mentioned it more often- well maybe others.

/wants Sweets/ or sweets...

One Part Exuberance; Two Parts Obsession: happy charliepenguingal on February 8th, 2008 07:59 pm (UTC)
You know how I am about het, but this I love. As a pair, I always preferred Don/Terry to Charlie/Amita. I just love the way she *knows* him. And it's not because she's a profiler. I would have LOVED to see what she'd be like with this more psychologically self-aware Don. All, "You're just figuring that out now? Don, I've known that about you for years."

Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on February 8th, 2008 09:44 pm (UTC)
Oh, now I *like* that bunny... Terry comes back for a case and meets up with newly shrunk, courtesy of Bradford, mores self-aware Don and gets to smirk "I knew it all along!" Brill. If I don't write it I may have to beg our local Terry fan sororcula to give it a go. ;-)

I'm very happy about your comment. I didn't think this was your cup of tea at all and was rather shocked you commented on it, so thank you!
perhaps some frottage is in order: [numb3rs] Don and Terry up closesororcula on February 9th, 2008 01:24 am (UTC)
Haha, I love that idea. And that is exactly why I love Don/Terry, too.
rodloxrodlox on February 8th, 2008 10:37 pm (UTC)
the eye is always the calmest spot.

this is a terrific drabble.
(had to re-read the "into pieces" line twice - it works both as the crime's description, and as Don's action against the perp)

lovely closing image.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on February 8th, 2008 11:16 pm (UTC)
Do you read the Confession posts? I tried to fit in an acknowledgment of the irony, but no room sadly.

Terry always was the sensible one, so it made sense for her to be the eye of Don's stormy behavior.

perhaps some frottage is in order: [numb3rs] Don/Terry black and whitesororcula on February 9th, 2008 01:25 am (UTC)
Still lovely! :-)
autumnwritingautumnwriting on February 9th, 2008 04:17 am (UTC)
Quantico - FBI headquarters - is located in the northeast.

Those of us who actually live in the northeast semi object to that statement. Lol.

But seriously...you don't get real nor'easters in Virginia like you do in New England. But I loved it anyway. : )
CeriseRevecerisereve on February 10th, 2008 02:27 am (UTC)
Terry may not have been able to point out the irony of the statement, but I think it came across all the same. It’s in the subtext of Don acting like a hurricane.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on February 10th, 2008 06:54 am (UTC)
Re: Irony
Interesting... I'd love to hear how you see it.
CeriseRevecerisereve on February 11th, 2008 05:21 am (UTC)
Re: Irony
How I see it? *Scratches head* Aren’t you writing from Terry’s POV here? Without explicitly telling the audience she finds his statement ironic, don’t you show it by having Terry mention it in the fic? She’s watching Don be irrational and hot headed while knowing they’ll end in sex and with him in tears.

I think I’ll stop now before I continue to ramble endlessly. =)
rubynye on January 1st, 2009 12:35 am (UTC)
This one is, well, wonderfully atmospheric. Wow.

(And goodness, I should reply to a lot of your lovely replies to me today. I like filling your inbox with joyful comments; it's the least I can do when you write all these incredible stories!)
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on January 1st, 2009 12:39 am (UTC)
You like reading my happy little fic, I like reading your happy little comments. Everyone wins! I like this plan! /beams/