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04 March 2008 @ 11:59 pm
Numb3rs Fic: Vice - Part 16  

Title: Vice - Part 16
Series/Universe: Vice
Pairing/Characters: See Series post
Rating: NC17
Spoilers: Seasons 1, 2 and 3
Summary: Kim finds out about Tim's new job and confronts Don (AU)
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ

Monday, 6/11/07 - Night

Despite rushing to unlock her front door before fishing her ringing cell phone out of her purse, Kim didn't catch the call in time and it went to voicemail.

Grumbling she set down her purse and shopping bags and paced as she retrieved the message.

"Agent Hall, it's Evangeline from Assistant Director Larson's office. I realize you're on leave, but," the woman's voice had a note of hesitation in it, "I think you're going to want to check your email."

Kim deleted the message once it was done, her brow furrowed in confusion.

She walked over to where she'd left her laptop on at her desk and connected to the FBI extranet to retrieve her work email.

The message her boss' assistant was calling about was undoubtedly the most recent one. It was labeled 'Reassignment'.

'Please be advised that Special Agent Dwayne Carter has been offered and accepted a position on the Los Angeles office's Organized Crime Task Force. His new duties will begin immediately.

Staffing levels are currently being reviewed for this field office and it is likely your position will be eliminated. There are several offices in the South in need of agents so it may be necessary to transfer you upon your return to ensure a position within the Bureau is available.'

Kim slammed the lid down on the laptop and started pacing again, hands clenching and unclenching, seeking an outlet for their angry energy.

A chime rose up from her cell phone indicating a text message.

She snatched the phone off the desk and kept pacing as she glanced at the screen: one message from Tim. She paused long enough to open the message and read it.

'Great news! Got new job! Come celebrate! Calhoun's @ Pico and Westwood'

She hesitated for a second then grabbed her purse and headed out the door.

Calhoun's bar meant a good stiff drink and a new job meant her brother was buying.


"To Tim!"

Jesse raised his glass and Robin and Nadine followed suit.

"To me!" Tim exclaimed happily.

They all finished off their champagne and Tim excitedly refilled their glasses.

"My main man is moving on up," Jesse said, beaming.

"You too, man!" Tim said, bumping shoulders with him. "You're a businessman now! How cool is that?"

"Well, I have Nadine to thank for it." Jesse leaned over and gave Nadine a kiss. "If you hadn't told me about your bank giving out easy to get small business loans I'd still be trying to get this detailing business off the ground."

"Hey, fifteen grand is nothing so I figured you'd have no problem getting a loan," Nadine said, draping herself over Jesse. "I'm so proud of you."

"And I'm proud of you," Robin echoed to Tim.

"Thanks, babe." Tim gave Robin a kiss, which turned into three or four.

"Get a room," Jesse teased.

"Oh hey!" Tim said, suddenly remembering. "They told me that since I'm an employee I can get into Code anytime I want. I can also go out to dinner at The Loft without waiting like a freaking week for reservations. Pretty cool, huh?"

Robin and Nadine exchanged a glance.

"Very cool," Jesse agreed.

"And they can arrange for me to have friends in one of the private VIP rooms at Code. That sounds awesome!"

Nadine stifled a giggle and Robin gave her a subtle warning glare.

"Code's a great club," Robin enthused. "I love it."

"You go there often?" Jesse asked.

"I used to," Robin said carefully. "Not so much lately. I've been busy."

Nadine covered her laugh with a cough. "Excuse me," she said, rising and heading for the ladies room.

"Aren't you going to go with her?" Tim asked, confused.

"Yeah, don't chicks always go to the bathroom together?" Jesse piped up.

"Nadine's a big girl," Robin said, drinking her champagne. "I'm sure she can find her way there and back."

"Kim!" Tim spotted his sister entering the bar and got up to go meet her, waving her in his direction.

"What's all this about a job?" she asked once Tim had embraced her in an ebullient and perhaps a little intoxicated hug.

"I got a new one!" he said, leading her over to the table.

"But you just started a new job a couple of weeks ago," she said, confused.

"Sure, but a bigger company that they work with wanted to hire me away. My boss recommended I go since his son works there already."

"Still driving?"

"Yeah, but I've got a better shot at learning stuff and moving up in the company over time. Besides, they're paying me a ton of money plus they gave me a big signing bonus on the spot! Come meet my girl Robin. Nadine's off in the bathroom."

"Hey, Kim!" Jesse held up his glass in greeting.

"Hi, Jesse."

The brunette woman at the table was faced away from her as she approached.

"Kim meet Robin, Robin meet my sister, Kim."

Kim recoiled when Robin turned and she recognized her.

"Hello, Kim," Robin said politely.

"Robin?" Kim blinked for a moment as her brain tried to process what was going on.

"You know each other?" Tim asked.

Nadine returned from the restroom, but stopped short when she set eyes on Kim.

"Oh." She looked over at Robin who simply nodded almost imperceptibly. "Uh, hi Kim."

"What's going on?" Tim asked, looking between all three women.

"What was the company who hired you away?" Kim asked, a chill in her voice.

"It's run by some guy you apparently know," Tim said. "Don Eppes. Eppes Enterprises."

Kim tensed, her hands in fists by her side.

"You are not going to work for them," she said tersely. "I don't care what they told you, how much money they offered, you are not working for him."

"What's going on?" Tim looked perplexed as Kim turned on her heel and stormed out of the bar, Tim following right behind her. "What's the problem?"

"Why don't you ask Robin and Nadine?" Kim said acidly. "They work for Don; they're his whores," she spat out.

She unlocked her car and got in, starting it up quickly.

"Where are you going?"

"To get you out of a mess... Again," she said. She rolled up her window and peeled out of the parking lot as Tim stood flabbergasted, left behind.

"But I don't want out," he said ruefully.


"What the hell do you think you're doing!"

Don nodded to Carlos hovering at the door of his office to leave him and Kim alone.

"I assume you're talking about Tim," Don said, watching Kim fume.

"I can't believe you!" she yelled. "I risked my career to save him from a life of crime, I even swallowed my pride and asked you - a criminal - to help me save him! And now you just hire him to be a criminal full-time?" She let out a huff of disgust. "I know you were angry that I broke up with you, but to get back at me through my brother is low, even for a crook."

"I'm not getting back at you!" Don rose to the bait. "I'm trying to do what's best for your brother! If he's part of the family I can watch out for him, protect him!"

"The only person he needs to be protected from is you!"

Don shook his head at her. "You have no idea, do you?" He crossed over to the wall behind his desk and swung a large painting aside to reveal a safe. He opened it with the biometric and retinal scanners and then a numeric passcode.

Opening the safe, he rifled through and pulled out a small stack of files. He opened one and threw it on the desk for Kim to see the photos inside.

"Aldo Arkushian: Armenian crime lord. Recently relocated to Los Angeles after he wracked up too many murder raps in his home country." He tossed another opened folder on the desk. "Dar Gahaman: His man in the field. He sets up drug deals and handles hits when they don't need a contract professional." He opened a third folder and tossed photo after photo from it on his desk. "Here's Tim with Aldo. Here's Tim with Dar. Here's Tim and Jesse shaking hands with Aldo." He tossed the last of the photos and the folder on his desk.


"Tim just thinks this is some rich businessman who wants to fund his detailing business. What he doesn't know is that he's just looking to use him - to use his driving skills to run drugs or to use his knowledge of cars to plant bombs..." He leaned over the desk staring her down as she looked stunned at the pictures. "Your brother's a good guy, but not the best judge of character. Once I bring him in he'll be trained to be street savvy. He'll be protected by a world class security force and he'll learn how to protect himself."

"I had no idea..." Kim picked up one of the pictures with all four men in it. "I've heard of both of them. Interpol sent the FBI an alert when they came to LA."

"And you didn't break up with me," Don said bitterly. "You left me." He gathered up all the folder contents to put them away. "You took off in the middle of the night and just stopped returning my calls. You didn't respond to emails, you sent the flowers I couriered over away... You refused to see me. No explanation. You just left."

"I found out you were a criminal," Kim said stiffly. "I'd been seeing suspicious things for a while and then I saw the invoice for an event at The Loft on your desk. The charges were clearly inflated. Entertainment? Room setup and decor? Some pretty lame euphemisms for hookers and drugs!"

"First off, we have nothing to do with drugs - nothing. Yes, entertainment is prostitutes, but the other charges are for gambling setups." He put out his hands. "Everything we do is legal in Las Vegas. I basically break zoning laws to do it in LA instead. And second," he paused briefly, the mockery of a smile on his face, "who do you think left that invoice out for you to find, who left you all the breadcrumbs to follow."

Kim stared at him, shocked. "You wanted me to find out you were a criminal?"

"Yes. I needed to know what your reaction would be and it seemed better to have you find out over time than hit you with it all at once. I was hoping you'd see that all we do is help people enjoy their vices. No one gets hurt."

"I'm an FBI agent! Why would you want me to know you were a crook?"

"Because I loved you!" Don shouted. "Because I had to know if you'd accept me once you knew who I really was. Clearly you didn't."

"You never loved me!" Kim yelled back. "I bet you just wanted an FBI agent in your pocket! I was just another one of your conquests, someone you fucked on the side even though you were already fucking your brother!"

Seething, Don stormed over to the safe, pulled out a small object and threw it at Kim.

With her quick reflexes she caught it easily and looked down at it. It was a black velvet box of an unmistakable size.

"I was trying to decide whether to ask you at Thanksgiving or Christmas or maybe even New Years, but you made that all moot." As she gazed at the box in her hand he continued. "And for the record I never slept with Charlie the whole time we were together. Not once! I gave him up for you! I've never done that for anyone before! Charlie means everything to me. He's all the family I've got and still I told him no."


Don came around the desk, snatched the box from her hands and put it back in the safe. He closed the door with a slam and stood with his back to her.

"Your brother's a grown man. He can make his own decisions. So can you."

Kim stifled a choked off sound that slipped past the last shreds of her control, then ran from the room without another word.


When Charlie stepped into his brother's office he found Don sitting with his head in his hands at the desk.

"I saw Kim leave." Charlie gestured to the exit. "I take it her visit didn't go well."

Don let out a pained exhalation. "You mean the part where I gave her enough to hang me with? Or the part where I told her I loved her and she pretty much spat in my face?"

"She was crying when she left," Charlie said gently.


"She still loves you."

"No, she really doesn't."

"Yes," Charlie stressed. "She does. She always has. And you love her." He crossed over to lay a hand on Don's arm. "Go after her. Tell her you miss her, you want her back. I know you do."

Don forced a smile. "Sorry, not going to happen, buddy."

Charlie paused for a moment before speaking again.

"When you told me... When you started going out with Kim and said you couldn't be with me and her, I never made a fuss over that. Do you know why?"

"You figured she'd be gone eventually like all my other girlfriends?" Don mocked, full of self-pity.

"It was because you were obviously in love with her. I wanted you to be happy, to have the normal life I know you always secretly wished for. Don..." He crouched down and tugged on Don's sleeve to get him to look him in the eye. "I love you more than anything in the world. But I'm in my thirties now. You don't have to spend the rest of your life taking care of me."


"I won't deny that being with you fulfills a part of me that no one else ever could, but it's not worth the cost if it means you're alone the rest of your life." Charlie gave him an encouraging smile. "Go be with Kim. Let her make you happy."

Don laid his forehead against Charlie's and they sat in silence a moment.

"It doesn't matter," Don said sadly. "She won't take me back. I love her, but she hates the real me..."


Kim angrily wiped the tears from her eyes as she hurried up the front steps of her house.


She whirled around at the voice coming out of the shadows, reaching for the gun at her hip that was no longer there.

"Tim?" She let out a sigh of relief as her brother jogged up to her. "You startled me." She turned away and busied herself with unlocking the door and letting him in. "Why didn't you just wait inside? I gave you a key."

"Because as dumb as you think I am, big sis, even I know better than to sneak around in the house of someone who carries a gun. No thanks. I just waited in my car for you to show."

She tossed her keys and purse on the console table and headed for the wine rack, rapidly selecting a bottle only to have Tim take it out of her hands and put it back.

"I'll make us some tea."

"Since when do you take care of me?" she asked with a forced chuckle.

"Only when you let me," he replied, smiling at her from the kitchen as he put the kettle on the stove. "When your cat got hit by a car, when your college boyfriend dumped you because he got accepted to Yale Law, when you were sad about Mom and Dad not living long enough to see you graduate from the FBI Academy..."

"You're keeping track?" she marveled.

"Doesn't happen often." He pulled two mugs out of the cupboard. "And last year, even though you wouldn't tell me why you were sad."

"Last year, this year... Some people all they do is make you cry," she mumbled.

She curled up on the couch underneath a throw trying to get a hold of her emotions.

Once the tea was made, Tim put a mug into her hands and sat down beside her, giving her a few minutes to sip her tea before giving her a little nudge.

"So what's his name and do I need to kick his ass?" he joshed lightly.

"Ha!" she laughed without humor. "Try to kick his ass and his bodyguards will probably kill you!"

"Bodyguards?" Tim asked, surprised. "Just who is this guy?"

"Your new boss," she said into her tea. "Don Eppes."

Tim blinked in shock. "No shit. You? And Don? Wow..."

"That's why you can't work for him. Not because he and I..." she hastened to say. "But because I found out he's a criminal. He admitted it: gambling, prostitutes and all that. I'm sorry, by the way," she said apologetically, "for telling you like that that your new girlfriend is a hooker."

"She prefers the term professional," Tim said as Kim looked at him in surprise. "I already knew and I don't judge her for it."

"You... You slept with a hooker?" Kim asked, appalled.

"I slept with plenty of them in Vegas, most of them out on dates, but a few paid ones. It's not a big deal. Their job is showing someone a good time. How can I fault them for that?"

"Because it's illegal and immoral?"

"According to who?" Tim asked. "It wasn't illegal in Vegas and it shouldn't be illegal here, but it is. And I don't go for someone else trying to put their morals on me. I believe what I believe and I want my shot at life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness just like the next guy."

"Tim," she said slowly, "I'm an FBI Agent. You can't just live a life of crime under my nose and expect..."

"Can you honestly say you've never done anything illegal?" Tim interrupted her. "Come on, confess your sins before you judge someone else."

"Hey, I might have destroyed evidence, but I did it to save you!"

"So being a criminal is okay as long as it's to your personal benefit?"

"No, it's not okay," she said sullenly.

"But breaking a federal law against destroying evidence for a felony like you did means you're better than someone who helps willing prostitutes work their trade with willing clients? Than someone who runs a sports betting pool or arranges a poker night?

"But that's for money!"

"So it's okay to break the law for personal reasons as long as you don't make a profit?"

"You're twisting this all around!" she exclaimed. "He's the bad guy! He's the criminal!"

Tim took the mug out of her hand and put it aside, picking up a stone from the little zen fountain on her side table. He forced the stone into her palm and closed her fingers around it.

"There's the first stone. You think you can cast it?" He took her by the shoulders and looked her in the eye. "Sis, listen to me. No one is perfect. Face it. You're a criminal. I'm a criminal. He's not so different from you or I. He's just honest about it. And now I'm being honest about it. I like this life. I took this job knowing full well what kind of company it was. You don't know what it's like out there in the real world. It's scary when you're on your own. Now I've got really good people watching my back and that's important to me." He let out a long breath and pulled her into a warm embrace. "I can't always have my big sis coming to rescue me. This way I won't need you to."

"I'm just afraid I'll lose you too," she admitted tearfully.

"Never." Tim pulled back and wiped the tears from her cheeks. "So this thing with Don..." He gave her an expectant look.

"We were involved last year and when I found out about what he was I left."

He nodded. "And tonight?"

"I went to see him, to tell him you weren't going to work for him. We kind of got into a shouting match. I accused him of just using me. I told him he never loved me. And he..." She got choked up again and had to pause for a moment before she could continue. "He had a ring in his safe. He told me he was going to ask me, but then I left him..."

Tim drew her back into his arms and she buried her face in his chest, letting herself give in to the sorrow and regret welling up inside of her.

"So does he still love you?"

"I think..." she said in a tiny voice. "I think he hates me,"

Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on March 5th, 2008 10:20 am (UTC)
Please see the Vice Series post for information on this Series and for the Part 16 Confession.


Emma DeMarais
riverotter1951: north American river otterriverotter1951 on March 5th, 2008 02:45 pm (UTC)
Thank you, thank you, thank you. This is a treat I look forward to weekly. I like the way you have taken the familiar and twisted it into this AU.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 5th, 2008 06:28 pm (UTC)

Think you can handle it not being weekly from now on? ;-)
(Anonymous) on March 5th, 2008 03:54 pm (UTC)
Your stories are just fantastic. The series you have created are intense and interested. You definitely rock.
It would mean a lot if you could take a look at my first numb3rs fic. I'm new to all of this and also I am from Latin America, so my English isn't perfect, but I think it's good enough to accomplish a nice story.
http://paranoid-woman.livejournal.com/528.html, or http://paranoid-woman.livejournal.com
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 5th, 2008 06:25 pm (UTC)
Re: Amazing
Hi and welcome to LJ!

I'd suggest spending some time at the LJ FAQs learning about things like lj-cut tags and doing a lot of looking around at journals to learn the etiquette.

If you post comments while you are logged in you can get email notification of replies like this so you don't have to keep coming back to look.

/gentle voice/
Your first story is *very* much a first story. I wouldn't worry so much about your English. If you can get a good patient beta they can correct your errors. Since you're new to fic I'd suggest doing some reading about the common pitfalls of new authors. Especially read about Mary Sues. Your suspension of disbelief is very high so don't be surprised if people don't rush to comment on your fic. We all love Charlie, but until you can write the Charlie we see on the screen it's going to be hard to get people to read.

First stories are always hard, which is part of the reason so many authors never publish their early works. It takes time to learn what's good and what's not, so be patient. Keep writing and keep reading other people's fic to learn what's acceptable and what's outside the limits of convention.

Thanks for reading and welcome to the fandom!
(Anonymous) on March 6th, 2008 02:54 pm (UTC)
Re: Amazing
Thank you so much for reading, I know the fic is weird. I will take your advice and read more, so I can improve my stories.
Your "gentle voice" means a lot.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 7th, 2008 01:22 am (UTC)
Re: Amazing
Best advice for any fic author? Get a beta. (Get two, they're small. Hehehe)

And I really suggest you log in before posting your comments so you can get your replies...
fredbassettfredbassett on March 5th, 2008 04:23 pm (UTC)
Oh dear, these two really have some sorting out to do.

Love the way we saw both Don and Kim's viewpoints here. Great installment.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 5th, 2008 06:31 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I guess I'm still getting you to read het in a way. Hehehe

Those two are nothing if not dysfunctional, but more proof they are meant for each other.

I still marvel at the fact the muse turned a cestfic HET of all things, but this Don/Kim angle oddly works for me. /shrugs/
fredbassettfredbassett on March 5th, 2008 06:54 pm (UTC)
LOL, yes the word dysfunctional could certainly have been coined for our Donnie.

As long as you don't start writing Amita het, then I'm still reading it, and even if you did, I might be tempted 'cos its you, but the woman really does annoy me!
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 5th, 2008 07:01 pm (UTC)
I've done a tiny bit of Amita het, but not much. I like my Amita better than canon so it makes it easier to write her IMHO.

Vice!Don is extremely high functioning for someone so dysfunctional, but if you want the quintessential definition, you'll be looking at Charlie in Virtue.

Oops, did I drop an anvil there? My bad. Hehehe
Cynthia: CD B&W Eppes by angeliksmall1trackmind on March 5th, 2008 08:49 pm (UTC)
Wait, so it is going to be Don/Kim?
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 5th, 2008 09:19 pm (UTC)
Virtue is, yes.
andi: Charlie Eppesadmiralandrea on March 5th, 2008 04:30 pm (UTC)
You've written a really great part here. I particularly like the scene between Don and Kim and then Charlie coming in and telling Don a few home truths *g*

I'm intrigued to see how that plays out.

I also liked Tim explaining things to Kim as well. He points out that he knows what his weaknesses are and he's found a way to live with them and maybe even turn them into strengths.

Great stuff!
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 5th, 2008 06:58 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I think this is one of the best Parts to date. It has the distinct advantage of being the first to truly have *every* scene focused on one event. The rest of the half days are like that. On each of the final three days a major event happens and is covered throughout the day and night. It really makes the installments more dynamic and dramatic, not having to mix and match a bunch of scenes with different focuses.

That Don/Kim scene in particular is one of my favorites. The Tim and Kim scene was a late addition, but it works for me to have them in stronger parallel since they clearly are so much alike and needing the same things from their lives: both adult orphan eldest siblings with younger brothers who need extra protecting, both have strong ties to family - almost too tight, and both have had their sense of morality skewed by life experience. Unfortunately it's made Kim a purist and Don a criminal...

Who says never the twain shall meet? Hehehe
iolsaiiolsai on March 5th, 2008 04:32 pm (UTC)
/hands German chocolate/

Hee, love the mini-series posting schedule.

This part is fantastic. You didn't promise too much ;-)

Nice setup for Kim to leave the FBI- she really seems to like her job less and less.

I really like how happy and proud Tim is about his new job. So enthusiastic and excited. You portrayed that well.

Nadine and Robin might actually know a thing- or two, or ten about Code and the Loft, but they act clueless about it and Tim and Jesse have no idea...

"Aren't you going to go with her?" Tim asked, confused.

"Yeah, don't chicks always go to the bathroom together?"

That's amusing.

Then the realization, when Kim recognizes the girls. I like the way you wrote her reaction.

"But I don't want out,"
I can just see the kind of face Tim makes when he says that.

Don and Kim- kinda sad. So obvious they are still so much in love, but yet so hurt.
They really need to figure it out soon.

"Everything we do is legal in Las Vegas. I basically break zoning laws to do it in LA instead. And second," he paused briefly, the mockery of a smile on his face, "who do you think left that invoice out for you to find, who left you all the breadcrumbs to follow."

Hee, good lines. I can just see Don's smug expression when he says that.

You write Charlie really well, being understanding, trying to talk some sense into Don and just wanting him to be happy.

Tim and Kim's relationship is really nice too.
I like the parallels of their sibling talk to Don and Charlie's.
And the role reversal of having the younger siblings, who were usually taken care of by the older ones, being the ones to comfort and take care of Don and Kim. Very sweet.
I feel bad for Don and Kim- so full of misunderstanding, thinking the other hates them, being desperate about it because they still the other..
Poor them :(

I was hoping you'd see that all we do is help people enjoy their vices.
Hee. Well I clearly am enjoying *your* Vice ;-)
mercilynn: colbylovescharliemercilynn on March 5th, 2008 05:55 pm (UTC)
I really really really enjoyed this installment, Emma. The dialogue lines were FANTASTIC. I went to chose a favorite and I couldn't... Then I went to list them all and there's too many! ;-) Wonderful job!
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 11th, 2008 01:31 am (UTC)
Yay! That's wonderful to hear. This is one of the best non-climax installments IMHO. I love the Don/Kim scene to bits. The fight and the follow up scenes just work together so lovely. /sigh/

Oddly, I'm finding I'm going to miss writing Vice.

100 scenes written... Ten to go... Then it's all over but well, Virtue and Sin and prequels... Oh my!
hear me roarmagisterequitum on March 5th, 2008 09:41 pm (UTC)
Yay! *Sighs in content and relaxes*

Thank you, Emma. For a person who has had terrible days for a long time, this makes me happy.

Don and Kim time! And you did not let down on your promise that this was the best for them. I like how you put them together, let them shout/hash all that out. Then you gave the two brothers, Charlie and Tim, the chance to point out the feelings that still exist.

No, Kim, he doesn't hate you! He can't. No man who goes to those lengths to take care of your brother, hates you. :)

And thanks in advance for the speed-up in when you are giving these to us. That is awesome.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 5th, 2008 10:39 pm (UTC)
Thank you, Emma. For a person who has had terrible days for a long time, this makes me happy.

I'm glad. I've been watching all day looking for your comment since this was Part *16*. :-)

Don and Kim time! And you did not let down on your promise that this was the best for them. I like how you put them together, let them shout/hash all that out. Then you gave the two brothers, Charlie and Tim, the chance to point out the feelings that still exist.

I didn't want to spoil that the Don/Kim was an argument, but despite the conflict the whole intent of the half day was to show despite their fundamental differences they are alike and still care for each other. The Charlie scene has been in there forever. The Tim scene is pretty new. (The first scene was so new it didn't exist at like 9PM last night thus the late posting.) I ended up liking the parallels and really liked giving Tim a chance to show he's all grown up and doesn't need his sister to fight all his battles for him. That and he gets a great 'throw the first stone' speech in. /grins/

Personally I love the ring bit. He throws it at her then later snatches it back out of her hand. He's a guy, he's hurt - rejected before he could even ask - and I can see him doing that out of spite. Only to Kim it's proof she was wrong, he really did love her. Oh to be in her shoes when she realizes she might have blown it with the one man she shouldn't have walked away from. Ouch. And to be in Don's later when he realizes not only did he confess his love he just gave an FBI agent enough rope to hang him with, enough to destroy everything he's worked so hard to build up and protect.

No, Kim, he doesn't hate you! He can't. No man who goes to those lengths to take care of your brother, hates you. :)

Yeah. It was clear, wasn't it, that Don secretly funded Jesse's small business loan? He's smart enough to know that just hiring Tim won't keep him out of trouble if his best friend is in over his head. But hiring clueless Jesse? He's smart enough *not* to do that. Hehehe

And thanks in advance for the speed-up in when you are giving these to us. That is awesome.

Yay! Someone bothered to read the Confession!

I'm trying not to panic because Part 17 is OMGEMPTYGAH, but the rest of the Parts are either all done or a good portion done. It's just that one that is taunting me now. The Epilogue I am making myself write last. Kind of like dessert... /grins/

Glad you enjoyed the promised Part and hope your days start getting better soon.
darkkevlar: smile don and coopdarkkevlar on March 6th, 2008 03:53 am (UTC)
aww *sniff Sniff

even thought Kim is not my fave Ex (and none of them are....) this is the chappy I've been waiting for...
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 11th, 2008 01:35 am (UTC)
I knew there would be some slashers who wouldn't like Don/Kim and hell I was one of them! I fought the muse tooth and nail and it took *months* before I finally saw that this was how it needed to go.

The confrontation was inevitable. I've carefully kept many protagonists and antagonists apart in Vice, having them meet usually a single time to great effect, but I kept looking forward to getting Don and Kim back in a room.

In Virtue though? They're in the same room *a lot*. (And possibly in each others pants. Hehehe)
Karen: numb3rs boysbyrons_brain on March 10th, 2008 08:03 pm (UTC)
Ooooooooooooooh great chapter! I love the Kim/Don relationship you have here really looking forward to more...
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 11th, 2008 01:39 am (UTC)
Yay! It was hard to believe that cestficcers would buy a change midstream to het, but I'm grateful that people aren't deserting me in droves over this.