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08 March 2008 @ 12:01 pm
Numb3rs Fic: Staring Down the Barrel of a Gun  
Written for numb3rs100 Challenge #149 – Faith


Title: Staring Down the Barrel of a Gun
Series/Universe: Staring Down the Barrel of a Gun
Pairing/Characters: Don
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 100
Spoilers: None
Summary: Alone and unarmed Don has to hope someone will come save him
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ


A hand points a gun - not at his chest, at his head.

Dirty cop, dirty cop, dirty cop... Shit I didn't see this coming.

He has faith in his team. One of them will come looking for him, one of his agents will shoot this guy before he shoots Don.

A hand points a gun, aims, finger on the trigger...

When a shot splits the air and he's still standing he knows; his faith was not in vain.

He turns, relieved, to thank them and freezes in shock.

A hand points a gun. The hand belongs to Charlie.

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Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on March 8th, 2008 08:03 pm (UTC)
Confession
This fic is - as you see it, character for character - exactly what I wrote last night in ten minutes shortly after midnight.

Yes, this fic was 100 words exactly with absolutely no editing.

I felt compelled to publish it as is (though I kind of wanted to change the semicolon to a colon) just to preserve this little wonder. Most of my fic is 99.9 percent first draft, and many of my drabbles are very close to spot on in their first writing, but I really liked this fic and its twist so I wanted to freeze it in time, keep it in its perfect initial state forever.

Yes, I know it's just a drabble and not the Magna Carta. :-P

I didn't title this fic until this morning and am not quite sure this is the best title for it. It does sum up the situation, or rather situations that Don finds himself in. First he's staring down the barrel of a gun belonging to a cop on the case he's working who is apparently behind the crimes and doesn't want to be found out. (I assume Don's on social time, maybe hanging with the team at Gonzalez and therefore not wearing his gun on his hip.) And then Don finds himself staring stunned at his brother, who just killed a man to protect him, behind a gun he probably didn't even know Charlie had.

I've already imagined what comes next so if I'm not careful this might become a series. (If that happens I'm going to *really* regret the name of this thing being so long and involved...)

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
hear me roar: Haha!magisterequitum on March 8th, 2008 08:06 pm (UTC)
Ooh. This was good. Totally did not see Charlie coming in with the gun.

Glad to have you writing one! I've been trying to do some and then trying to read some and leave comments.

A series? I likes series... Especially from you! :p
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 9th, 2008 08:02 pm (UTC)
FYI

It's a five fic series now - I wrote all five yesterday.
perhaps some frottage is in order: [numb3rs] Isoscelessororcula on March 8th, 2008 08:26 pm (UTC)
Man, that last line made me GASP very loudly. OH, CHARLIE.

Nice job.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 8th, 2008 08:36 pm (UTC)
\o/

Gasp FTW!

/is all happy/
melissima: don/charlie elevatormelissima on March 8th, 2008 08:32 pm (UTC)
OMG, Go Charlie! I love this. I love that Don's counting on one of his team, and that one of his team does come through--albeit the very last team member he expected to see.

I have a fierce!Charlie icon around somewhere, but not on my userpics apparently. I will have to go find it for this series! :)

{    ♫ siri ♫    }: numb3rs + i wish so close [d x c]thisissirius on March 8th, 2008 08:35 pm (UTC)
That was a very unexpected ending, but definitely one I approve of!

Charlie coming to the rescue of his brother. Charlie, who's carrying a gun. I hope you are careful and that this does become a series, because yes! I can fully get behind that idea :)
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on March 9th, 2008 09:37 am (UTC)
Gah! I should know better than to tempt fate like that.

Not only is this now a five part series, I've already written all five parts. /headdesk/

You win...
nativestarnativestar on March 8th, 2008 08:58 pm (UTC)
Oooh! Very nice take on the prompt. I love the last two lines, I didn't see that coming.

It's great because this stands well on its own, but there's also so much potential to expand on if you decide to. Why does Charlie have a gun? Did he kill the man? Don's reaction? I think it would make for a great series. *eggs on the muse and crosses fingers*
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on March 9th, 2008 09:44 am (UTC)
Okay, even though you haven't been posting on my LJ for ages, somewhere you must have seen word that my muse responds to requests liek whoa. (Well, just not requests from *me*.)

So this is now a five part series. The parts will be released one per week in accordance with the weekly prompts at numb3rs100. They have all been written. (Because the muse is like that. You ask? She delivers. Hehehe)

Thanks for the encouragement!
ladygray99ladygray99 on March 8th, 2008 09:03 pm (UTC)
May I feed the bunny of a series off of this? *eg* Charlie kills a guys. There's so much that can be done.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 9th, 2008 09:47 am (UTC)
So much in 400 words? ;-)

Bunny fed.
Five fic written.
Series completed.

Now one tired author gets to go to bed.

Thanks!
ladygray99ladygray99 on March 9th, 2008 07:04 pm (UTC)
WooHoo! :-)
telperion_15: DonBWtelperion_15 on March 8th, 2008 09:08 pm (UTC)
Ooh... *shivers* That was unexpected. Lovely evocative drabble.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 9th, 2008 09:48 am (UTC)
Thank you. Evocative was one of my goals for this year...
fredbassettfredbassett on March 8th, 2008 09:12 pm (UTC)
Very unexpected! Excellent, I like surprises :)
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 9th, 2008 09:51 am (UTC)
Surprise! It's a five fic series now and all five fic have been written!

Hope that was a pleasant surprise...
Jelsemiumjelsemium on March 8th, 2008 10:01 pm (UTC)
Excellent! I'm so glad you wrote this! (In four years of writing drabbles, I think I've had three of them come out exactly 100 words on the first try.)
Tamanna: charlie equationsswingandswirl on March 9th, 2008 01:00 pm (UTC)
*speechless*

Wow, Emma. I love this. I love how powerful Don's faith in his team is, the strength of the... validation, I guess? of that faith when the shot sounds.

And that last line? So much, in just two lines. Brava. *applauds*

PS: I saw your comments above, and I just wanted to let you know I'm in awe of how much you write, and the sheer quality of your work. Unfortunately, I haven't had the chance to read more than a few of your fics, but I just thought I'd let you know you're very much appreciated.
Abbie Strehlow: Charlie_Writingknotted_rose on March 9th, 2008 05:26 pm (UTC)
::hugs::

While I don't read much fic these days -- and I comment less than I should -- I do appreciate you and think you're brilliant and read almost everything you post.

I'm glad that this has become a series!

::more hugs::
rubynyerubynye on October 2nd, 2008 12:58 pm (UTC)

ZOMG.

Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on October 2nd, 2008 05:58 pm (UTC)
/bows/

Looks like this drabble achieved the desired effect. ;-)