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15 June 2008 @ 11:24 am
Numb3rs Fic: Seven Deadly Sins: Pride  
Written for numb3rs100 Summer of Sin/Seven Deadly Sins Challenge – Pride

Title: Seven Deadly Sins: Pride
Series/Universe: Seven Deadly Sins
Pairing/Characters: Don, Charlie
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 300
Spoilers: None
Summary: A criminal targets someone close to Don with deadly results
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ

"Sinners! You will all be cut down - one by one!"

Don laid the ransom note-like message aside and focused on the photographs of Charlie's office scattered all over the war room table.

Every surface was covered with a copy of the publicity photo from Charlie's book.

Every photo was sliced through at his neck.

The word 'PRIDE' was scrawled across some of the photos in red ink.

When he picked up a picture of the mechanism - he lacked a better word for such a gruesome device - that had been attached to Charlie's office door he had to sit down.

Charlie's T.A. Todd had been first through the door that morning. At six foot one the blade didn't slice his neck so he survived.

The blade had been set to decapitate someone six inches shorter: Charlie.

Only Charlie's quick action and first aid skills had made sure Todd had gotten to the hospital in time. He'd lost a lot of blood, but he'd pulled through - just barely.

With a shaky hand, Don put the paper down and let out a breath. He'd missed lunch and dinner, working all day to come up with a suspect list of anyone who would target Charlie and send the FBI a message about it.

"The Judge finds Dr. Charles Eppes guilty of the sin of PRIDE!" the paper read.

If the punishment for pride was decapitation Don feared what this Judge might decide to do to people who had really sinned.

"Eppes!" Don snapped his phone open on autopilot when it rang.


"Charlie! Are you okay?"

"Yeah, David and Colby are still here with me. It's just..."


"Todd... He... Something went wrong. They lost him. He's dead."

One murder, Don mentally chalked up. Now it was his job to prevent a second.

Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on June 15th, 2008 06:24 pm (UTC)
I hereby announce that any and all of this fic series may not be completely original. ;-)

Seriously, I've probably seen a bunch of movies and TV shows on the topic (I almost did a Charmed fusion fic based on their 7DS episode) so I figure there's an excellent chance I'll be influenced consciously or unconsciously by something that came before me.

FWIW, I think I saw the movie Se7en - at least bits of it. (It had Brad Pitt in it? I really don't remember.) So any likenesses could be due to that factor.

I think this is one of those 'under the sun' fic where there really is nothing completely new. Okay, more that I'm not going out of my way to try to make it fresh and new. I just kind of wanted to enjoy a creepy serial killer vibe in a drabble case fic and needed to make this disclaimer lest someone blast me for plagiarizing later.

So consider all of this recycled material. And if I come up with something you haven't seen before? Go me. ;-)

As far as the mechanism goes, I vaguely remembered some stuff like medieval torture devices and spring loaded machetes from TV, but I was thinking something more high tech: a spinning circular saw blade on an arm that activates when the door opens to swing into the doorway opening while turning at high speeds to slice open whatever is in its path.

See, that's what I come up with when I'm not really trying to be original. Beware how ghoulish I could get if I *did* try...

Oh yeah, I confess the first line of the fic was inspired by a sample in the song Hot Doggie by Colourbox: "You will die/one by one!" Of course they inserted another sample in between those two line: "lover boy". LOL (Supposedly the sample comes from The Evil Dead which makes it funnier - and oddly, more apropos!)


Emma DeMarais
Firestorm717firestorm717 on June 15th, 2008 10:52 pm (UTC)
Re: Confession
Haha! I knew someone would do a Se7en series eventually. Loved that movie, and looking forward to seeing how this one turns out ^^.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 16th, 2008 01:40 am (UTC)
Re: Confession
I really wish I could remember that movie! I may have just hovered nearby while someone else watched it and seen bits (I'm annoying that way), since I really can't remember much of anything about it.

I've got the second one done and plans for all 7, but I'm still letting it unfold myself...
iolsaiiolsai on June 15th, 2008 07:02 pm (UTC)

I am very attached to my head :)

So, I don't assume you are taking orders for the other 6 victims?

I like that series.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 15th, 2008 07:18 pm (UTC)
Orders, no sorry I have no plans to kill Amita. ;-)

But then I haven't written any past the second one. Hehehe

Let's just say *at least* one N3 character dies in this series. Once they do you can decide if that pleases you or not. /wicked grin/
iolsaiiolsai on June 15th, 2008 07:23 pm (UTC)
How did you know that was going to be my request? :P
Jelsemium: Amita in Pinkjelsemium on June 15th, 2008 07:37 pm (UTC)
Gah! No killing Amita! She's one of my favorites!
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 15th, 2008 07:44 pm (UTC)
Relax. It's not her who gets it.

But keep in mind *at least* one person dies.
iolsaiiolsai on June 15th, 2008 08:05 pm (UTC)
Oh snap :P
andi: Don Dark Avengeradmiralandrea on June 15th, 2008 07:06 pm (UTC)
Ooh creepy! :shudders: Now I need to find some nice, comforting fic to cheer me up, so I don't take that image to bed with me!

Failing that, hot smut will probably do the trick ;-)
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 15th, 2008 07:14 pm (UTC)

Well, your choice should depend on whether you want to sleep or to dream. Hehehe

But yeah, creepy and shudders are what I was going for. /chalks one up/ /evil grin/

(Anonymous) on June 15th, 2008 09:56 pm (UTC)
OK, I'm creeped out already... I did see the movie Se7en and I remember it vividly... because it is the only movie that ever gave me nightmares!

Looking forward to seeing what you come up with.

Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 16th, 2008 01:42 am (UTC)
Actually that is the reason why I think I might not have seen it all: no nightmares! I can't even shudder at the gorey parts because I don't remember anything about the movie!

FWIW, The Shining gave me nightmares. /shudder/
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Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 16th, 2008 01:42 am (UTC)
Thanks! Shudders mean I did my job! LOL
Karen: numb3rs donbyrons_brain on June 16th, 2008 06:10 pm (UTC)
::trembles:: oh noes how terrible!
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 16th, 2008 07:06 pm (UTC)
My writing? /cowers/ I hope not.

Hehehe JK
Karen: bones angelabyrons_brain on June 18th, 2008 08:10 am (UTC)
::nods head:: I'm really scared now... ::hides under bed::
clwilson2006clwilson2006 on June 16th, 2008 06:23 pm (UTC)
well now, we have another six to go AND a promise of a charater death.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on June 16th, 2008 07:08 pm (UTC)
LOL Well you of all people would look forward to that. ;-)

Just keep in mind that I said "at least one" which means I am not technically limited to one character death.

And yes it's a real canon character that's not some one shot guest star or an OC...
paranoid_womanparanoid_woman on June 16th, 2008 07:21 pm (UTC)
Ohhh exciting! I really like the way this is going. I can't wait for more... :D
Charlie being guilty of pride seems very appropriate when I think about some scenes from certain episodes. I think the idea is great!