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04 December 2008 @ 02:20 pm
Numb3rs Fic: Anchor or Ball and Chain  
Written for numb3rs100 Challenge #188 – Snow


Title: Anchor or Ball and Chain
Pairing/Characters: Don/Kim, Alan
Rating: PG
Word Count: 100
Spoilers: UP, Counterfeit Reality
Summary: Don gets a phone call on the first day of vacation with Kim
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ


Freedom.

Fresh powder.

Shushing down the slope, skis and body flying, singing a duet in perfect harmony.

Work hard, play hard - this was the reward.

At the bottom of the mountain Kim waited for him, auburn and teal his destination. Another run? Head to the lodge? The cabin? Slices of life laid out on a platter for the choosing.

An expert stop, admiration from passersby and his cell phone vibrating as Kim approached smiling.

"Hey, Dad! What's up?"

Kim's face was a mirror; he watched it as the news sunk in, chilled his bones.

The snow turned into rain.

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Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 4th, 2008 10:24 pm (UTC)
Confession
Anchor or ball and chain: both will drown you just the same.

In this case the title refers to Kim as potential wife/ball and chain and the family as Don's anchor. Clearly in canon he chooses the anchor which, not incidentally, is the more appealing of the two metaphors.

Speaking of, I don't attempt metaphors and imagery often in my fic (mostly because I suck at them), but I felt like this one did a decent job of having more to experience than my normal surface value fic. A nice exercise to attempt in 100 words. I'm curious to see how readers interpret it.

Credit to Dan Fogelberg's song Same Old Lang Syne for the final line.

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
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Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on December 5th, 2008 12:02 am (UTC)
Thank you. I can only take credit for the penultimate one though.
hear me roarmagisterequitum on December 4th, 2008 11:24 pm (UTC)
Love it. Love the metaphor. You don't suck at them. This is the perfect type if metaphor, one that makes you reflect and think and is subtle.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on December 5th, 2008 12:04 am (UTC)
Thank you!

They're just so hard! Gah! I'm so kicking myself for not taking any creative writing classes in college. (Okay, so I took Poetry, but that hardly helps here save giving me an advantage in terms of brevity when it comes to drabbles.)
paranoid_womanparanoid_woman on December 5th, 2008 01:17 am (UTC)
Wonderful, as always. I so love your writing, Emma. ♥
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on December 5th, 2008 01:54 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! That's very sweet of you to say.
devon99 on December 5th, 2008 07:39 pm (UTC)
This was really lovely.

I liked this very much.

And I think you are being very hard on youself regarding your use of imagery and metaphor in your work.

Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on December 5th, 2008 07:41 pm (UTC)
Thank you.

Perhaps I am, but to me, being hard on myself is how I get better and this is all senseless if I don't grow as a writer through all these stories.
twins_m0m on December 5th, 2008 08:02 pm (UTC)
Wow! So much emotion in so few words. Liked it alot.
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on December 5th, 2008 08:04 pm (UTC)
Thanks so much! I love writing stories where the weight of canon hinted at is enough to fill the tale with meaning.