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28 March 2010 @ 11:58 pm
Numb3rs Fic: Out of a Clear Blue Sky  
Written for numb3rs100 Challenge #256 – Crumple

Title: Out of a Clear Blue Sky
Pairing/Characters: Charlie, Don
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 200
Spoilers: None
Summary: They're just talking and walking outdoors on a nice day when it happens
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ

The day is bright, sunny, clear. Don is smiling after making a crack about getting Charlie his own supercomputer. Charlie is laughing, already halfway into trying to tell his brother how much it costs to buy a supercomputer.

They both hear the shot, the crack of the sniper's rifle splits the air and rends the morning quiet with violent intent.

Don drags Charlie behind a wall, out of the line of fire. They look at each other to confirm neither is hurt.

Charlie doesn't even register why Don's expression shifts, worry replaced by shock, replaced by panic.

Confused, he looks down at himself; there's a dark spot on Charlie's shirt, one that's rapidly spreading.

He crumples into his brother's arms, suddenly weak, unable to grasp the reality of having been the sniper's target.

He wants to ask why, but nothing comes out as he watches Don above him making a frantic call for help on his cell phone.

The day is bright, sunny, clear. It doesn't seem like the kind of day to die, but as Charlie watches Don's tear-lined face - pleading with him to stay - fade into darkness, he comes to understand today might just be that day anyway.

Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on March 29th, 2010 10:38 am (UTC)
Apparently this month's angst fest isn't over yet. So much for crack fic. /sigh/

I really liked this prompt when we were deciding on March for N100, but I feel like I've done it a grave disservice by writing it and publishing it between 2AM and 3:30AM. But that's what I get for leaving my ficcing until the last minute. /sighs/


Emma DeMarais
ladygray99ladygray99 on March 29th, 2010 10:54 am (UTC)
Ouch. Oh God. beautifully crafted. Every line was just right. Especially the last. Perfect.

PS how's your head?
Candi: Don Sleepingmustangcandi on March 29th, 2010 11:24 am (UTC)
Poor Charlie. Poor Don. You really are on an angst roll, aren't you? LOL. Wonderfully done... even if it was 2am when you wrote/published. *hugs*
rubynye: Back to Back (Numb3rs)rubynye on March 29th, 2010 12:42 pm (UTC)
*makes small meeping sounds* C'mon, Charlie! Rally! Don't die!
t_vo0810t_vo0810 on March 29th, 2010 03:34 pm (UTC)
good gawd, emma. you have broken up Don and Coop, killed off Don last week, and now it's Charlie's turn....I am afraid I am going to insist on some schmoop pretty soon. A wedding fic maybe? /wink wink/

Of course, you could ride this angst train right on back to Homicide. Since you really are on a roll here. A wonderfully awesome, heart-wrenching roll. So what do you say? How about we make a deal: 1000 words of my nano novel for a 1000 words of yours? Whaddaya say?

And no worries about staying up and publishing so late for your weekly drabbles. You know we love ur fic <3 and this one was definitely a winner- in a dark sad i-need-smishes-now sort of way. xoxo
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on March 29th, 2010 08:36 pm (UTC)
... I missed the 'killed off Don last week' one. I'll have to look for it, unless you'd be kind enough to give me the direct URL :)
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 29th, 2010 09:18 pm (UTC)
You can just click on the Previous link on this page to get to it. I haven't been publishing that much as of late.

FYI You've pretty much had the fic ruined by being told what happens in it, but you're welcome to read it anyway.
t_vo0810t_vo0810 on March 30th, 2010 01:24 am (UTC)
i suck. my bad. bygones. :(
Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 30th, 2010 01:51 am (UTC)
You couldn't have known, sweets. It's okay.

t_vo0810t_vo0810 on March 30th, 2010 01:52 am (UTC)
ilu <3 /hugs/
t_vo0810t_vo0810 on March 30th, 2010 01:23 am (UTC)
here ya go: with deepest sympathy sorry for spoiling it for you :(
devon99 on March 29th, 2010 06:50 pm (UTC)
No Charlie *whimpers* stay away from the light.....

Can't believe you killed Charlie!! Lol, actually I can:) Hope you're getting better by the day sweetie ♥
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on March 29th, 2010 08:35 pm (UTC)
ROFL... I'm sorry... when I read 'you killed Charlie' my mind went to something my ex-husband kept saying about some animated adult thing... something like... 'they killed Kenny!' -- apparently in every episode, this kid dies.

Emma DeMaraisemmademarais on March 29th, 2010 09:25 pm (UTC)

That would be South Park!

"Oh my god! They killed Kenny!"
"You bastards!"

(It's even funnier when you know someone named Kenny. LOL)
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on March 29th, 2010 08:36 pm (UTC)
Wonderfully done, Emma... wonderfully, bad sadly, and well done.
Polaris Aphroditefree_anam_girl on March 30th, 2010 02:33 am (UTC)
what?!?!?! Charlie????? poor Don
great fic
Jelsemiumjelsemium on March 30th, 2010 03:53 am (UTC)
Oh, no! Poor Charlie! Poor Don! This came out very well. (And, hey, what's wrong with doing things at the last moment?)
just_air_leftjust_air_left on March 31st, 2010 02:40 am (UTC)
aww :( Thats so sad.
lilacs_roseslilacs_roses on April 19th, 2010 07:26 pm (UTC)
I love your avatar! ... Is that Chakotay (spelling?) from Voyager?
just_air_leftjust_air_left on April 19th, 2010 07:54 pm (UTC)
Thank you, Actually its Sam Adama From Caprica haha.
Tamanna: Colby smileswingandswirl on April 1st, 2010 08:14 pm (UTC)
Meep! Charlie!

No, he doesn't die. I REFUSE to believe it. *sticks fingers in ears and goes lalalala* Yes, the view of the Nile is lovely from here, thank you...