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13 December 2005 @ 12:10 am
Numb3rs Fic: Surrender  
Written for numb3rs100 Challenge #36 - Relinquish


Title: Surrender
Pairing/Characters: Don/Charlie
Rating: R
Word Count: 100
Spoilers: None
Summary: Don is the only one who can make Charlie surrender
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ


Everyone thinks it's Don who's tightly wound.

Don's either on or he's off - beer in hand, laughing, letting the tension unspool...

It's Charlie who has no off switch.

It's Charlie who needs to relinquish control.

Don knows this.

Don understands.

He knows how Charlie's mind works.

And how to make it stop working.

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Hands bound, legs spread open...

Mouth gagged because speech means words, means thinking...

Slow torment - teasing, sensual, erotic - drives all conscious thought from his mind.

The numbers disappear and all that exists is sensation.

Don whispers to him.

"Don't think... Feel..."

And Charlie surrenders.

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Keylaneverbelonged on December 13th, 2005 08:28 am (UTC)
guh. just guh.
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 13th, 2005 08:40 am (UTC)
/magically rush prepares a batch of vanilla bean ice cream/
/scoops copious amounts into a bowl that look just like Larry's/
/hands bowl to neverbelonged/

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
Keylaneverbelonged on December 13th, 2005 12:41 pm (UTC)
yummy!

you are very welcome.
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 05:11 am (UTC)
:-) /starts thinking about what to offer next time/
Shantalshantalanadevil on December 13th, 2005 08:48 am (UTC)
And how to make it stop working.

After that line my mind just melted.

"Don't think... Feel..."

Just........wow.

Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 13th, 2005 08:51 am (UTC)
/gets an idea to do a ficlet with Don, Charlie and some melting ice cream/

A new bunny! What a treat!

I'm glad you liked the drabble.

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
Walking Liability: Don/Charlie Brothers in Arms asemic on December 13th, 2005 03:04 pm (UTC)
This is amazing.

speech means words, means thinking...

Oh yes. You really know how to hammer a story home in the most sensual of ways.
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 05:17 am (UTC)
Thank you. I did another experiment in trying to write like you (Tension and Release) and since that didn't turn out very well I gave up and wrote this instead. It's sadly nowhere near close to your style, but I still want to keep trying...

I'm glad you liked it.

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
sydiansydian on December 13th, 2005 06:27 pm (UTC)
Bravo.

Hot and concise and beautifully vivid. *bows*
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 05:19 am (UTC)
Thank you. I like the constraint of 100 words and the challenge of getting it to *exactly* 100 words. Now I just have to work on doing a better job of it each week I write these.

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
sydian: [cel] doris & rock - odd couple {me}sydian on December 14th, 2005 07:27 am (UTC)
Oh, you're really good at it already! Writing drabbles always drives me batty - I often end up having to make do without my beloved conjunctions. Woe!
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 10:14 am (UTC)
Conjunctions... Well, now I have Schoolhouse Rock in my head, thank you very much! /snort/

Nothing like an educational earworm when you're ready to go to bed. ;-)

"Conjunction Junction, what's your function?"

/snicker/

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
sydian: [sga] teyla - space girl {me}sydian on December 14th, 2005 03:37 pm (UTC)
Bwahahaha. I'm a fountain of earworms. Apparently even for songs I don't even know. :D

A song about conjunctions, though? Sounds like exactly the right thing for me! ;)
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 05:33 pm (UTC)
LOL! Well check it out then! It's rather an American institution!
Conjunction Junction

I'm a fountain of earworms

/shudders at the visual that brings up in her/

Hey, I'm impressed you even *know* that word! Nicht schlecht!
/hands sydian a cupcake with a candle in it/
;-)

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
Cynthia: CD Helplessly Attracted by shantalanadev1trackmind on December 13th, 2005 06:43 pm (UTC)
I love it. Partiuclarly this line, as others have mentioned.

Mouth gagged because speech means words, means thinking...

But these are really good, too:

"Don't think... Feel..."

And Charlie surrenders.
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 05:22 am (UTC)
Thank you. I must have rewritten the speech/words part more than any other section of this drabble. That ending? Luckily a first draft gift from my muse. (Which was good since I normally sweat over endings!)

I'm glad you liked it.

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
Cynthia: Charlie Scribble by midnighta1trackmind on December 14th, 2005 09:52 pm (UTC)
Luckily a first draft gift from my muse.

Nice of your muse to provide it.

I must have rewritten the speech/words part more than any other section of this drabble.

Well it definitely paid off. It's a wonderful line.
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 11:38 pm (UTC)
Nice of your muse to provide it.

Yes, I feel blessed by her presence. I often say I don't write, I take dictation from her. Where she gets this stuff, I don't know, but I'm grateful to be the conduit for it...

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
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Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 05:26 am (UTC)
LOL! Sweet hot got me thinking of mustard of all things, which got me thinking of the end of UP. (See? Everything *is* Numb3rs!)

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
cat_willow (Jan)cat_willow on December 14th, 2005 12:48 am (UTC)
Yay! I love drabbles! And you did so much with so few words.
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 06:07 am (UTC)
Thank you. I really like writing drabbles so I'm glad there's a Numb3rs drabble LJ comm to encourage me to write one a week.

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
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Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 06:11 am (UTC)
I'm sorry to hear that. My condolences... Please travel safely...

Just check the LJ before you start. I may get impatient and post so no sense working on one that's already out there...

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
Karen: Charlie (Numb3rs)byrons_brain on December 14th, 2005 02:25 pm (UTC)
Melts into a puddle of goo.... wow.... please expand on this.....
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 14th, 2005 05:44 pm (UTC)
/claps excitedly/

Another puddle of goo! My favorite! Oh, it's like the holidays are already here. /sigh/

Expand... Well, my muse hasn't delivered anything to follow up on this, but she can hardly resist the allure of Bound!andGagged!Charlie, right? I'll see if I can cajole her into more at some point.

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
Karen: Charlie (Numb3rs)byrons_brain on December 14th, 2005 10:53 pm (UTC)
hmmmmmm, bound and gagged Charlie....

You know Charlie could get kidnapped and it's up to Don on his own to rescue him.... and what's this after subduing the kidnapper, he finds poor defenless charlie bound and gagged....

In a rage of protective/jealousy (your choice) Don drags him home to ravage him relentlessly all night....

How does your muse feel now?
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 15th, 2005 12:08 am (UTC)
Sounds like you have your own muse over there! ;-)

Trust me, mine is up for more Bound!andGagged!Charlie, but I have to wait for her to actually *deliver* the fic to my fingers before I can type it up.

/waits impatiently/
/taps fingers/
/looks at clock and decides a snack would be good about now/

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais