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18 December 2006 @ 01:28 am
Numb3rs Fic: Final Flame  
Written for numb3rs100 Challenge #85 – Candles


Title: Final Flame
Pairing/Characters: Charlie
Rating: G
Word Count: 100
Spoilers: None
Summary: Charlie blows all the candles out at the end of the night
Notes/Warnings: Read the disclaimer on my LJ


The flames danced and jumped as the air stirred, sending flickering shadows against the walls.

The candles waited to be snuffed out as a breath was drawn in, deep and silent.

Full lips pursed, a face lowered to the first wick.

A soft puff of air and light extinguished, leaving only a lazy trail of smoke curling up in its wake.

Each candle met the same fate until the last.

There was a pause before the final flame – casting dim light on a sleepy home – was blown out.

The house went dark.

A quiet footfall was heard and then silence.

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Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 18th, 2006 09:30 am (UTC)
Confession
It would be nice to imagine this as Charlie closing up the house on the final night of Hanukkah, blowing out the candles on the menorah.

But nope. Sorry.

First I haven't heard of anyone using candles that would last from sundown to bedtime. I think they'd have to be some pretty big candles to last that many hours. All the menorahs I've seen took fairly small candles.

Second I've read it's verboten to blow out the candles on a menorah. (Sadly, I'm pretty clueless about all this. My Jewish relatives can barely remember to even light their candles each night!)

Still, the visual of Charlie's full pursed lips hovering over a dim flame in the darkened house was rather appealing. So imagine whatever candles you want. The end of night ritual is still rather calming and soothing.

This is one of those experimental fic, so even though I don't think it's that good I try to cut the experiments some slack. I want my muse to feel like she can try things without being punished or restricted.

Here's hoping I don't get punished for my lack of Hanukkah knowledge. ;-)

Thanks,

Emma DeMarais
T.: Charlie Eyesmonkeyfun1 on December 18th, 2006 07:13 pm (UTC)
Re: Confession
Second I've read it's verboten to blow out the candles on a menorah. (Sadly, I'm pretty clueless about all this. My Jewish relatives can barely remember to even light their candles each night!)

you're so right about that. but you blow the candles out on an advent wreath... not that the Eppes' are Lutherans or anything like that. heh.
but it's such a pretty picture that you paint. I like the solemnity (not the liturgical meaning of the word either) of Charlie blowing out the candles and having the peace of his house.

Just a pretty piece.
Thanks Emma.
T
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 18th, 2006 07:25 pm (UTC)
Re: Confession
You know I think I noticed a fic recently where they made Alan Jewish and Margaret Lutheran. I'm not familiar with the custom of advent wreathes, but I'll be sure to Wikipedia them now. /smiles/

I like the solemnity as well. (That's a great word.) I'm totally okay with this being an end of night ritual that has nothing at all to do with religion. Secular rituals can be lovely and peaceful as well.

I'm glad you liked it and I love your comment.

Thanks,

Emma
irena_adler: Charlie numbers easierirena_adler on December 18th, 2006 11:09 am (UTC)
It is nice imagery of Charlie blowing out candles in the dark. I had thought Menorah too, so I guess that makes me extra ignorant. :)
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 18th, 2006 07:50 pm (UTC)
I liked that image and when I found out *after* it was written you're not supposed to blow them out I really didn't care. It was still lovely and I had never specified what kind of candle they were so it seemed moot.

I doubt anyone who hasn't studied Comparative Religion would be knowledgeable about the minor details of multiple faiths, so I don't think it's a bad thing to imagine it's a menorah. I just wanted to make sure nothing I wrote would offend and I can't see how this would.

Thanks,

Emma
andi: Charlie Eppesadmiralandrea on December 18th, 2006 03:26 pm (UTC)
I thought maybe it was Charlie blowing out candles that he'd lit for Larry's blast off... Or maybe for dinner, hoping that Don was going to come home...

I like the number of possibilities inherent in this. And the last line was just beautiful.
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 18th, 2006 08:06 pm (UTC)
I thought maybe it was Charlie blowing out candles that he'd lit for Larry's blast off

I thought about that too. There's a nice little drabble based on that idea over at N100. There's also a nice little drabble that *will* be at N100 that puts forth a more romantic angle on Charlie and candles. Whether it's candles for a dinner party or mood lighting for a lover who waits patiently upstairs, it's all good.

As far as the last line goes, I like it too, but there's no comparison to this line (which I like so much better) from TS Eliot.

And seeing that it was a soft October night,
Curled once about the house, and fell asleep.


I'm no poet, but my muse just keeps on trying...

Thanks,

Emma
andiadmiralandrea on December 18th, 2006 08:11 pm (UTC)
I'm not much of an Eliot fan, "Cats" the musical aside. But those lines were okay. I do prefer yours though. I found it very evocative...
Emma DeMarais: BlueEyeemmademarais on December 18th, 2006 09:14 pm (UTC)
I've never seen Cats. It sounds lame to me. But Prufrock has stayed with me for years, which to me is a sign of a challenging poem. Some lines I love (Do I dare to eat a peach?) and some are like huh? But it always makes me think and I like that.

I'm trying to be more evocative in my writing, but so far it's been fairly elusive. Nice to know I'm getting somewhere though...

Love the new icon... /grins/
andiadmiralandrea on December 19th, 2006 05:51 am (UTC)
I haven't seen it, but some of the songs are powerful, particularly "Memory".

Thanks, that's one by jaredsexual from Killer Chat...
Karen: numb3rs charliebyrons_brain on December 18th, 2006 10:27 pm (UTC)
this is so poetic...

::bakes muffins:: want one?